Wednesday, November 4, 2009

Gone

And then she said that one day she would leave and they wouldn't even notice, they wouldn't even miss her but that didn't matter because she'd be far away by then, some place where she was happy. I just looked down at my feet and told her that leaving won't make the pain go away. I waited for her to say something but when I looked up she was gone.
-written by me on September 3rd-
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10 comments:

  1. AnonymousNovember 5, 2009 at 3:59 PM

    Ohh great ending. Very well crafted; a story in on paragraph. It leaves so much unsaid, and lets me think about what happened before and what will happen after. Brilliant, just perfect.

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  2. Athena.November 6, 2009 at 1:40 AM

    This was so lovely, and I relate to it so much in so many different ways. In such a conversation, both characters would be me, see.
    xx

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  3. B.November 6, 2009 at 4:11 AM

    oh this is so melancholically beautiful.
    it makes a heart sigh.

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  4. DaisyNovember 7, 2009 at 7:28 AM

    So lovely...

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  5. ElizaNovember 7, 2009 at 8:36 AM

    astonishing, bitter, wonderful. i'm all aching.

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  6. BarryNovember 7, 2009 at 10:48 PM

    I like this, well written. :)

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  7. UnoCosaNovember 7, 2009 at 11:46 PM

    nice find ... love the photo and words, xx

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  8. Tia in the SkyNovember 7, 2009 at 11:51 PM

    You write wonderfully, it's... well, wonderful!!

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  9. codyNovember 8, 2009 at 4:45 AM

    so lovely..

    codyjune.blogspot.com

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  10. ErinNovember 9, 2009 at 10:48 PM

    this is very good.

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